For the Moment

[DaBomb]

An Indian summer holds
back impending chill

for a moment

calling back to mind
springtime's warmth,
slumbering peacefully

for the moment

awaiting the passage
of winter's healing touch

[Redstormy]

This is lovely, we have snow here. Hey you know I had to say hi
to you here as well. :)

Red

[laleesh]

bryan, i chant for winter's healing touch with our hellacious indian-smmers.

this poem brings to mind the dependability of the seasons, one of the relatively few things we really can depend on, and for some reason it makes me think of the words of king solomon, "there's nothing new under the sun". hummmmmm? evocative.


nice stuff,
:)
laleesh

[mike poet]

I thinks thats whats going on here now. You described it well in this poem.

[TRexroth]

great portayal, i love that last line

[DaBomb]

Hi Red :). We haven't gotten any snow here yet, but we have gotten some patches of warmer-than-usual weather. Thanks for the reply.

Lala, I enjoy the bits of warmth that hold off the snow (mainly because of the ice that gets on the roads - otherwise winter is a beautiful season). Made you think of King Solomon, huh? Thank you.

Thanks Mike. I think we've got a bit more of these warmer temperatures coming up here in Jersey.

Thank you TRex. I'm glad the poem ended on a good closing note.

Bryan

[ascension]

you have such a nice way with words - very well done. the repeated line seems to work and roll off the tongue. thank you for sharing

[DaBomb]

Thank you very much ascension. I observe the wonder of nature and try to capture it in words... sometimes it works :).

Bryan

[GG]

i enjoyed the poem, knowing that the patch of unusual warm weather is the inspiration. you've captured it with a wisdom of words!

i thought that this winter will pass without much chill for those patches of warm i had here. but...i was wrong.
Mind if i ask what are indian-summers?

thanks,
GG

[DaBomb]

Sorry it took so long to respond to this GG. Thank you for the comment. An Indian summer, around my way anyway, means an abnormal period of warm, spring-like weather deep into winter, especially if there has been a bitter cold preceding it. Thanks for asking.

Bryan

[m_miles]

Hey Bryan,

I enjoyed the sense of balance you have here. Your use of line breaks is perfect to capture the moment.

Sincerely,
miles

[Territorial Hawk]

nice.

[Matt]

I really like this, especially "springtime's warmth, slumbering peacefully". Each stanza flows into the next as smoothly and regularly as the seasons themselves.

[Michael]

Holy summer, Batman, this one’s been in hibernation for some time. Glad you brought it back up, Matt.

Bryan, “For The Moment” is filled with wonderful imagery, but it’s not the usual imagery found here in The Nature Forum. Rather than imagery that inspires the vision, the imagery in this piece is more corporeal. The reader actually feels the climate changes while progressing through the poem.

The single line segues play their parts extremely well, aiding in that imagery.

Again, I’m glad I got the chance to read this one.

As for you, laleesh.

the dependability of the seasons, one of the relatively few things we really can depend on

Have you ever been to New England? What did Mark Twain say? “If you don’t like the weather, wait a minute.” :D

[Beki]

perfect description of a familiar moment :)

[DaBomb]

Miles, that comment is so right on. That is exactly why I broke those lines off to themselves, to convey the restful pause of the Indian summer, like nature is catching her breath. Thank you.

Thanks THawk.

I appreciate that Matt. As I'm sure you know, it takes time to make poetry match its subject. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I always am happy to read your responses Michael... I feel I learn just from what you comment. To wit, I thank you for saying how the feeling of the seasons comes through, and how the line segues enhance that. I'm glad you got the chance to read this and reply.

:) Why thank you Beki. You know, for all of your imaginative conveying of nature's splendor, I don't think I've read nearly enough of you in this section. Are you holding back from us? :D Just trying to instigate some work from you.

Thank you all,
Bryan

[Beki]

Thanks for the encouragement Bryan, but I fear my writing pretty much is limited to haiku/senyru/tanka and love poems. I will keep your request in mind though :)