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Jake
12-03-2003, 03:48 AM
I will begin by considering the frame:
It is heartwood of southern yellow pine stained walnut.
There are late Victorian surrounds that rise to an ornate crown
and end in a Sheraton finial.

The sash divides light over light
and the crosshatched mullions break
sand-fused glass to diamonds and triangles
that stream down light like an old painting where the artist employed God
as a metaphor.
The light’s bent geometry squares, warms a spot on an oriental rug
where my old dog circles once then sleeps unaware of the minute bits
of dust that cover her delicate eyebrows and whiskers in a silent rehearsal
for a later time and place.

The bottom light is attached to cotton ropes that are in turn connected
to lead weights that ride up and down inside the casement to ease the lift.
The lock-downs and other closures are hand-forged brass butterflies and buttonhooks
connecting porcelain knobs that move ratchet wheels
engaging a pawl in opening or in closing.

The sill is a simple rectangle running slightly greater
than the frame proper and has a slightly beveled edge.
But what catches my attention above all this description is a common housefly.
It is dead and lies crumpled on it’s side. But what catches my attention even more
is it’s large complex green iridescent eye that stares at me like the marble gaze
of a thousand statues.

Come look out the window with me.
There is nothing coming to save our life. is there.

Mary Ann
12-03-2003, 07:40 PM
Hi Jake,

I love the intricate detail of your description. I felt the dust, and saw the fly with the iridescent eye.

Mary Ann

nannabug
12-04-2003, 01:26 AM
Your attention to detail is remarkable, Jake. I run my hand along the window casement. Smell the old varnish on the wood. My mind's eye can see each description of the inanimate objects, and then the dog as it circles before laying down (why do they do that?). And then the dead fly. Staring but no longer seeing. Does they multi-faceted glass emulate the dead fly's eye? I shall gaze out the window with you and ponder upon this. Enjoyable read, Jake. :)

Rougestrega
12-04-2003, 01:46 AM
A good place to pull up a chair and doze

Rouge

Jake
12-04-2003, 03:11 PM
Thanks for reading guys. Yes, Nanna, thanks for catching that. If it seems like a fragment, it is, from much longer thing with Egyptian mythology and Book of the Death stuff that I didn't think would work real well here. I like to write description because it teaches one to look.

Barbriat
12-04-2003, 06:27 PM
I have a friend who works with wood. He is not a poet, but his products are built with the care and the eye of an artist. I will be so happy to read this poem to him. You speak the words of an art critic as you describe something so ordinary as a beautiful and practical window. Some of the vocabulary words :) confused me, but my friend will understand them all.

And in the midst of a carefully crafted item of useful and lasting beauty, death occurs and another item of beauty is gone.

Thanks, Jake. This is a wonderful piece of writing.

Jake
12-06-2003, 03:13 AM
Thanks Barb. The carpentar and the Lady eh. Notice how I cap'ed the L in lady. I mean it Lady.

ascension
12-06-2003, 03:27 PM
intersting way you brought about the story. took me a moment to take it all in. I enjoyed the perspective your brought to it. sounds and reads like stained glass. I can imagine the dog circling round to find it's spot.

Barbriat
12-11-2003, 05:43 AM
I explained that some of the words in your window description were foreign to me and then read your post to my carpenter friend. When I finished he said, "Is that all? Is there more? Where are the unfamiliar words?" :D

Jake
12-12-2003, 03:42 AM
Ascension, thank you for the read and nice words. Barb.. LOL not surprised. Every thing has its own vocabulary.
As I was saying to my neighbor… “ What am I telling you, you were out there in that 2 club mess straight in the face. I was on one just outside the white so I figures a knock down six cut and blocked it ob for a six.”
Golf
2 club mess in the face--- a wind directly at you requiring 2 clubs longer than you would normally hit
Outside the white--- just over 150 yards
knock down—a shot hit low to run under the wind
six… six iron
cut----- a shot that moves left to right at a controlled distance
block--- a shot that goes too far right due to a bad swing
ob--- out of bounds
for a six—took a 2 stroke penalty

LOL I’m sure that’s more than you wanted to know but you do now if it comes up
hugs