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Alethea
12-06-2003, 12:14 AM
stained motley cliffs jutting out above the water,
an opaque blue sky’s echo in steam and foam.
the hiss of vapors rising from an artesian well.
murmurs of the insurgent current
...................beneath the quiescent, frothy veneer.
briny sulfur crystallizing within the
.......................rocky walls, embracing the sauna.
a flogging from an ill-tempered wind.
hot springs mud,
...............wet and exfoliating,
.............................plastered all along my skin…
therapeutic stillness in the
...........................simmering, geothermal waters.
gusto and grit graze my lips,
the acrid air, whipping around and stinging
...........................like a million cold tentacles.

...lackadaisical... and absent...

DaBomb
12-06-2003, 02:46 PM
Nice sensory journey Alethea. You fleshed out the experience well enough to be seen, heard, felt, smelled and even tasted a bit. Good work.

Bryan

Alethea
12-07-2003, 02:55 PM
hehe thankyou. it was, in fact, an assignment, and those were the requirements... but i actually liked this one. so groovy!!

althea_kitten_$
12-30-2003, 06:38 PM
~dearest

it seems you put your heart and soul into everything you write be it assigned or of your own free will your words seem to pour from your heart ~yours~