Avian Envy

[DaBomb]

The cool air brushes down its back
How the rush of flight must intoxicate...
I envied the bird that freedom
To deftly oppose gravity's pull
With an open wing,
To leave behind an oppressive grasp
With one limb's gesturing.
I envied the bird its airy escape
Until a stiff breeze happened along and
The bird's flapped pinions couldn't hold it in place
And I understood, with weightlessness
Comes no anchor to secure.
With "escaping" comes threat of an oppressive push,
Of seeing solid ground no more.
And so I believe the bird envies me
My steady footing in adversity.

[GG]

i enjoy reading your poem. i feel that you felt what you wrote; and you have successfully passed that feeling on to me.

thanks,
GG

[judih]

Bryan
yes you're talented with a fine strong sense of presence

As for birds, well
i've just been enjoying formations of storks flying over Israel
heading south

such stillness,
playing on the wind
wings outstretched
v's and arrows
in the perfection of the air

wish i was there

judih
*peace*

[DaBomb]

GG, you're right - this is the product of some thoughtful meditation on nature and man, and the strengths of each. It makes me happy that you could feel the expressions here. Thank you for the comment.

Judih, I bow to your comment. Thank you. And as for the birds, they are indeed marvels of God's creation, which it sounds like you are enjoying there in Israel. I also appreciated the poem that you included, it is quite nice.

Bryan

[Michael]

Bryan, the first part of the poem is well written, painting a picture most humans would envy.

However, I am impressed with the segue.
Originally posted by DaBomb
Until a stiff breeze happened along and
The bird's flapped pinions couldn't hold it in place
And I understood, with weightlessness
Comes no anchor to secure.
With "escaping" comes threat of an oppressive push,
Of seeing solid ground no more.
And so I believe the bird envies me
My steady footing in adversity.
I may be reading too much into this, but I see a deeper message that says “escape” isn’t all it's cracked up to be. If I’m misreading, I apologize.

The entire piece is very well written, as is most of your work.

[DaBomb]

I greatly appreciate your response Michael; you are right to see such a meaning to my poem. That was my intention :). "Escape" can also be running away, and that often doesn't result in the kind of release that is hoped for. Thank you for the comment.

Bryan