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TearyEied
12-12-2003, 07:41 PM
When the tears slide like ice,
down your velvet cheek,
and the days are so cold,
just standing makes you weak,
this is when you'll know i'm over you.

When it hurts to sleep,
Because dreams could your mind,
and you can't breathe alone,

You are without me.

Dandylion
12-13-2003, 10:53 PM
wow...cold and chilly...I liked this one alot!~Dandy

iblieve
12-19-2003, 02:19 PM
You write with a deep understanding of emotional loss. I found this one to be a beautifully sad piece. The first two lines are awesome and set the chilly tone perfectly, iblieve

I look forward to reading more, my new friend iblieve

TearyEied
12-20-2003, 05:54 PM
Ibelieve,
thanks so much for your reply, i always love to see what you have to say! thank you so much