The Air Changed

[Dale]

PASSAGE


The air has changed
Cooler
Disturbing

Menacing dark clouds
Forming around the mountains

Walking
Alone
My thoughts like dying leaves
lost
Amongst the
Brilliant yellows
Reds

Now

Turning brown
Tossed
Rolling
Into
Decay
Before me

Shivering

Even Evergreens no longer
Whispering their secrets

Yield
To the violent cold
Of winter’s winds

I turned my back to the chilling wind
And walk backwards
Remembering
My
Summer

[Territorial Hawk]

Dale,

makes me shiver.

I like it.

[Dale]

Dale hands Hawk a warm sweater....Glad you liked it.............

[nannabug]

Very nice, Dale. Thank you.

[Dale]

nannabug, Thank you for comment, glad you enjoyed the read....

[Poeticpiers]

Hi dale delicious look back at summer
but winter has its own austere beauty ivor

[monkey boy]

brrr! a chilling poem, dale - nothing for it but to duck our heads and press on - summer's somewhere on the other side!

mb

[Dale]

Poeticpiers........with the prospect of spring .........winter has austere beauty.......yes it does....thank you for commenting

[Dale]

mb...."summer's somewhere on the other side!" yes and I am gonna find it too..............Thank you for commenting...-17C here today....brrrr

[TRexroth]

yeah its getting cold but then we'd be deprived of this poem
chiver on
trex

[Dale]

TRexroth, thank you for comment... I appreciate..... That you appreciated this one...

[Michael]

Dale, I can almost see this as a pattern poem. It may not have been intentional on your part, but the straight line pattern sort of reinforces the path that you’re walking.

This piece makes good use of other forms of imagery, even if you didn’t intend it to be a pattern poem.
Originally posted by Dale
Walking
Alone
My thoughts like dying leaves
lost
Amongst the
Brilliant yellows
Reds
---------------------------------
Even Evergreens no longer
Whispering their secrets
The simile in the first part of this quote creates a mood.

The assonance in the second part flows nicely. I like alliteration and assonance anyway.

Nicely written.

[Dale]

Michael......thank you.... your comments .........much appreciated...........