matches

[Tavis263]

fair thee well
fair thee well
my new hell

truth be known
no river lays straight
no faith is ever broken

trust in your fire
trust in the one you love
how many matchs will you burn
moon light shatters
under empty mental laughter
dont you rocognize
dont you recognize
you
anymore
where have you gone
my sweet, inner inside
why do you hide

stones thrown at the door
but its locked behind you
forever lies lies lies
stop the push
and shove the light
across the sky, sky, skys
Im losing my mine
my my mind

burning walls never lie
why did you ever let it happen to you
its perfect, nothing left to burn
but i will be there
watching you
watching me

your lie lie lies
matches in my hand
their waiting for you
watching your smoke
rise, rise, rise
nothing left hide
no more little diguise
no more lies, lies, lies

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Motavis
motavis@futureskully.com
http://www.motavis.com

[Brittney L]

Tavis,
Nice write.
For some reason this reminded me of Metallica. I don't even know if that's the sort of music you had in mind for this. And if not, then sorry.
trust in your fire
trust in the one you love
how many matchs will you burn

These lines are the ones that gave me the Metallica impression.

You did well to carry the idea of the matches throughout the song using words such as fire, burn, light, smoke. This was good because you weren't repetitive in the obvious.

nothing left to burn
but i will be there
watching you
watching me

your lie lie lies
matches in my hand

Gosh this was wonderful! How you state "nothing left to burn" then "Matches in my hand". And the fact that they aren't stated one after another shows you know what you're doing!

You kept the reader (listener) through this entire song with the way in which you've written this one and the order.

I definitely love this.

Britt

[Lyly]

Good read, the last stanza was my favorite...not sure why, maybe the image, maybe something else. I enjoyed imagining how this would sound. To me it seems that it would have a very unique sound to it. Bien - Lyly

[Lady Arduriel]

absolutely beautiful, Travis.

[Tavis263]

arcanumcafe url of UPTIGHT HATE (http://www.arcanumcafe.com/community/showthread.php?s=&threadid=39077)
Matches was a follow up to one of my songs I did earlier
titled Uptight Hate. Though never intended as a metal band
song. I think it can fit fast, slow or heavy which ever
anyone wants to let it mentally be heard. I like that people
picked out their favorite parts. It lets me know where
I am doing my best. When I get the music done for it and
a singer. I will post it to the site but that might take
a while just like all great things do.

Motavis
recordlabel@futureskully.com
http://www.motavis.com