Sacrificial Living

[iblieve]

She wading high water
but never getting wet.
Sowing her sorrow
with never a regret.
Able to smell the roses
while sowing her ****.
Life is yesterday’s dress,
death is a gown that easily fits.

Giving her all
when nothing is needed.
Forsaking her garden that
really needs weeding.
She doesn’t see
the sun going down.
Too many friends
never come around.
Darkness descending
the lights going out.
Tomorrow will be better
but she has her doubts.
Never one to be
predisposed to thought.
Propensity to dream
while tragedy is wrought.

Money is a tool
wielded like a sword.
Cutting away pain
till comfort’s restored.
Twiddling her thumbs,
wasting her time.
Trading her lost reality
for fantasies of the sublime.
She dwells in a world
of moral complacency.
Lacking those most needed
knowing no decency.

Her life is shrouded
in a materialistic tapestry.
While her eyes are blinded
to its beauty and mystery.
She dances with shadows
of past memories.
And even these
are getting hard to see.
If she had invested
in friendship that last.
Maybe her ship
wouldn’t be sinking so fast.

She laughs at your sorrow,
kicks up her feet
never realizing
she’s raw bleeding meat.
The scavengers smell it
they’re coming to eat.

iblieve

[Dandylion]

deathly dark...that last stanza is just gross...in a very dark and delicious good way...you know what I mean...lol. Beautiful and dark...just the way I like it:)~Dandy

[strawberygashes]

Originally posted by iblieve
She laughs at your sorrow,
kicks up her feet
never realizing
she’s raw bleeding meat.
The scavengers smell it
they’re coming to eat.

I had a friend like this once. She laughed at the pain people went throught and she never realized how much it hurt them. Dark and beautiful.

~morgan

[iblieve]

Thanks Dandy and Morgan, I knew her well, I just wonder if she's still bleeding from self inflicted wounds and laughing at other people sorrows, usually caused by her. Guess I'll never know and that is a good thing. Thanks for all your support iblieve

[Dandylion]

you know, I can read your stuff a hundred times and still get more out of it. I just had to come back and read this one again. Its one of my favorites. So dark...so very dark. I love you baby~Dandy

[iblieve]

Thanks my dear, I can read your poetry all day too. I guess we are poetic soulmates iblieve

[Moonshine]

Wow, this is great, in a dark and twisted way. Those last few lines pack a powerful punch, and again, I'm impressed. Wish I could have thought of this.

Yours,
Moonshine x

[iblieve]

I feel the same way about a lot of your work moonshine. I am glad you liked this one cause I knew her well and some people just set themselves up to be the feast. Thanks my friend. iblieve

[TorturedJester]

Aww yes, this one really hit home bro. I loved it. This is one of those that just pokes u in the eye very hard. Such emotion described masterfully. The final stanza was a real bleeder my man. Simply amazing. peace. tj

[iblieve]

Thanks Zack, yea this was rough and raw and I knew you would like it, where ya been, call us tomorrow night. iblieve

[Territorial Hawk]

Excellent.

[spunky22]

She's definitely wicked...Awesome write ibelieve! The last stanza did it for me too, it truly helped paint the picture! Awesome job- Marji

[iblieve]

Thanks Hawk and Spunky, believe it or not I nailed her in this one, though it wasn't her fault. Bi-Polar Depression is a wicked disease. iblieve

[spunky22]

:D

[Dandylion]

bringing this back to the top cause its just too damn good to let it get away. One of your best pieces babe~D

[iblieve]

Thanks dandy and spunky, I love the comments, they make my day iblieve

[Moonshine]

I just had to read this again...and comment. It's just brilliant!

Love,
Moonshine x

[iblieve]

Thanks moonshine, I alsoi find poems that I just have to read again, like warrior by you, a masterpiece.

[Gale]

Dark and awesome. I love the way this is written. Wonderful.

[VelvetCrow]

wow, excellent poem ilblieve and this confirms what I've thinking about lately, in the little time I've been here... you made feel like your my "god" or should I've said "demon" in Dark Poetry lol,
You know what I mean?

[iblieve]

Thanks dean my past is my darkness, I love it being dragged to the top.
Thank you gale I love your style of writing too
and my dear velvet crow, what a ****ing compliment, but I am just another lonely darc poet that found a way to bleed that heals instead of inflicts more damage. Thank you for the read, it is appreciated. iblieve

[sachmet]

I can only echo what others have said ...truely amazing write

[iblieve]

Thank you Sachmet for reading it. iblieve

[Eireann]

it seems that everyone has said what i was going to say about this poem. so, i will just leave it with an "i ****ing love this!"

[iblieve]

Thanks Eireann, that says it all. iblieve

[the_grey_girl]

I love this one! The last lines remind me of something I was told once about "victims" giving off pheremones like a dying deer..... and then they close in.

[iblieve]

Yes they do dear and the scavengers have good noses. Thank you for the comment. iblieve