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Kamikosan
01-20-2004, 05:23 PM
i'm standing over the sink looking at myself in the mirror. my face is a little bit paler but that's almost to be expected. my hands pull at the skin around the eyes, trying to stretch the dark rings away. how long has it been since i slept the night through? i've been lying awake and when i do sleep, it's a restless sleep that is haunted by the strangest dreams. i wish i knew what to do.

my fingers run through my spiky dark hair and i can't help but miss the long, thick locks i had nine months ago. how long would my hair have been now if i had left it alone? i never really liked it, it was such a pain to mess with, but it made me feel so feminine and luxurious that i was able to manage it. i guess that's what makes the woman, her hair. too bad i haven't felt like much of a woman for the past year.

i look at my naked female self in the mirror, and look at the black ink that unfolds into different designs on different parts of my body. my friend had asked what the deal was with all the tats? i shrugged and said it was a new addiction. i guess i'm addicted to pain. how much can i endure before i'll cry out? just sitting there begging in my mind for the pain to stop is almost a weird turn on. once the pain had been so bad i'd nearly had an orgasm. not sure what that says about me, but i don't really care. don't care much about anything anymore.

i slip into my boxers, and pull them over my slim figure. i have a nice body, too nice. no one really cares about what goes on behind the brown eyes that penetrate their soul. i pull on the jeans i bought from the men's gap and look at my now squarish looking bottom half. i put on my bra and pull my t-shirt over my head. there. now i have no figure and there is nothing for anyone to see. between these clothes and my spikey hair, i should have no problem keeping them away. whoever they are. in these clothes, i feel safe. i feel like i can dominate instead of feeling dominated. no one will look at me when i'm dressed like this. i'll be okay.

sometimes i wish i could dress sexy and be comfortable in it. but not anymore. i wish i could have long hair and wear clothes that make me look like a woman. but i can't. i'm not a woman, not really. not since he took that away from me. i'm just, what's left. at least, that's what it feels like. i've already had some guys tell me i need to grow my hair out. my response was like that of a wounded dog, "why?! so i can meet your standards?" in other words, so i actually look like someone you would ****? usually i just tell them that they are insecure in their sexuality, and that's why they need a woman with long hair.

i put on my shoes and go downstairs to my car. the guys i pass barely give me a second look. mission accomplished.

Barbriat
01-22-2004, 08:09 AM
Kami,

This is a good description of someone hurt and left scared and vunerable. Even in the animal world a scared and vunerable creature will try to escape/hide from being noticed by using camouflage and disguise. Good writing.

uncle mickey
01-22-2004, 10:50 AM
Hello there. I read your story with great interest and enjoyed reading your work. I am new here and do not want to make an comments that might offend. I'd offer one very small suggestion if I might — at the beginning of your story, I'd change the word
"SINK" to the word "WASHBASIN." To a writer pictures are money in the bank! The mirror suggests that it is not the SINK. Otherwise, I think you have a manuscript that you could put a stamp on.

God blesses, Unc'

tony schofield
01-22-2004, 05:20 PM
I agree with the others. An insightful piece of writing about one hurt individual. Next time I see a woman who looks like this though, I won't assume she's been through the same experiences! I also hope that knowing that they are still noticed doesn't bring any discomfort. As you imply yourself - so much that cannot be hidden is shown in the eyes. Nice writing

tony

Kamikosan
01-23-2004, 10:46 AM
barb: i never thought of an animal using camouflage. might be a good comparison for another story...hmmm.....:)

uncle: i tried inserting the word "washbasin"....just didn't fit cos i've never called a sink a washbasin before....:) i guess i'll just stick with sink, thanks for your suggestion, though...:D

tony: it's weird...whenever i see another girl dressed up a little more baggily than others, i always wonder...

thanks all for reading...

bethany *jump*