View Full Version : Feigned mortality. From Writings of a Vampire.
mike poet
01-21-2004, 11:08 AM
Darkness surrounds me.
My mortality is as a shell
and is empty.
Frigidity appeases .
filling my hollow with numbness.
This used to be me.
Fetid thoughts reside
In the back of my mind,
beside kindness
and deeds of brotherly love.
Am undead through eternity,
My goodness feigns mortality.
I seek to feel find only nil
Emotions not engrained in my soul.
There is no pleasure here.
Do not fall prey to the lure.
Nay stay away.
Once you become undead
You will remain as such
Through eternity.
Moonshine
01-21-2004, 05:47 PM
Powerful, in it's morbidness. A lonely life this must be. As I read it, I could feel a sense of sadness pulling at me.
Moonshine x
mike poet
01-21-2004, 07:36 PM
Yeah I'm sad right now. Life will change and I'm sure what I write will as well. For the moment I'm trying my hand at a Vampire story. It would seem to me that the limets of imortality in being a Vampire would make someone sad. It would seem to me the taken for granted pleasures in life would no longer be available. Ones physical existance would no longer be the same and all would be cold unless fed the lifeblood of a living being.
Kind hearted Vampires would most likely remain cold and forlorn.
iblieve
01-22-2004, 02:11 AM
I am sorry you are feeling down but sometimes the darkness in life is the greatest inspiration. I really enjoyed this one, dark morbid and to me spoke to some living breathing people who can never feel happiness or enjoy life. There are a lot of them out there as you well know. Glad to read you my friend. Much love iblieve
mike poet
01-22-2004, 09:58 AM
Its about my mother I guess. It depresses me that she is so stuborn and will not spend any money on property because its for sale. Myself is included in the grand scheme of depresion. The heat went out in her house and by the time crawfish season is over and the money is there to buy new central heat it will not be cold and she will have an excuse not to buy.
Its just depressing to have every daylight hour of life spent under carport/business. I have a 1978 trailer that is falling apart which adds to the depressiveness.
Even when my mother was healthy she was depressing to be around. Everything is negative and anytime I make a statement she counters it with some argumentive sense of logic.
I cannot leave her and find work at the Port of Iberia because I am her caregiver even though it is killing her to have to depend on me
I need to run business because it her means of income.
ibelieve, you seemed to feel where I am coming from as did moonshine. I hope the story comes out real depressing because some people are depressed and will relate.
I want it to come out a ray of moonlight in a dark souls life. I need one. Life is not atractive to me but do not worry my mother needs me so I must stay.
Territorial Hawk
02-15-2004, 02:28 AM
Mike,
this is good. I like it a lot.
Tell me, have you ever read Anne Rice's Vampire Chronicles?
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