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CLine20
01-30-2004, 07:28 PM
This is my deep theoretical justification
Placed between the summer dew
This is love pouring from my hand
A spring rain from me to you
When the winter puts the stars to sleep
To chase away sweet autums beat
I will still be loving you
I will still be loving you


The night is only what your heart cant mend
Twist, and bend and then pretend
That your fears will take you through teh day
That your fears will make me seem okay
So wash these fears away


Our minutes only come in fives
The days in pleasures
My life in highs
Your the only one whos reached the top
Your the only one who guides my fears
Scrubbed into these walls of tears


But the winter put the stars to sleep
But the winter put the stars to sleep


The night is only what your heart cant mend
Twist, and bend and then pretend
That your fears will take you through teh day
That your fears will make me seem okay
So wash these fears away


The winter put the stars to sleep
Inviting darkness from the deep
But the winter brought me you and I
So I'll see you where the seasons meet the sky

Lyly
01-31-2004, 03:04 PM
Firstly, you have lots of great images throughout the piece that I really enjoyed....just in your opening stanza you have so many! I also liked the flow and sound of, "The night is only what your heart cant mend/Twist, and bend and then pretend..." That definately stayed with me. As for titles...hm....how about: Seasons ?? A good read, thanks for posting, and welcome to Arcanum! - Lyly

woollams812
01-31-2004, 04:29 PM
The title that came to mind was 'From Me To You" of course that's an old Beatles one but nothing to say you couldn't use it. Another might be Lullaby for the love of my life. I really enjoyed reading this.