Only Willows

[Collin]

Breakfast wander; cold
pond waits under willows,
for morning mourning.

Broken plate swallows.
I swim in 25 years
of half-buttered toast.

Splashing first,
panic before sleep;
lying down sings softly.

Limbs still, I sink
to light-rimmed dark.
Only willows weep.

[Collin]

Thanks Dean,

I appreciate your feedback.

[iblieve]

This is a very interesting poem. I read it three times because of the imagery. It stands out my friend. Excellent iblieve

[Collin]

Thanks iblieve,

I appreciate the compliment. I have made some changes. Added a verse, shortened the others. Going for concise, ambiguious, and imagery laiden. Thanks again.

[Territorial Hawk]

Collin,

this is stunning. But then, I don't expect anything less.

[Collin]

T,

Thanks very much for the compliment. I appreciate it.

[naturalist]

really well done throughout. that second stanza truly grabbed me. the imagery was left open for interpretation; I really admire that in a poem. thank you for sharing your work. the title is lovely. the ending is gripping and almost continues on in a way into a whole nother set of emotions. the resignation at the end and the letting go is very thought provoking.

[erica]

yes, excellent imagery here.

[spunky22]

i agree with all of the compliments on the imagery but what I loved most about the poem was trying to figure out the "big picture" the whole poem is beautifully written..wonderful thoghts-Marji

[Wylde]

havent read u for a long while. great to do so again. :hot: