My Pain

[iblieve]

Slit my wrist
to bleed
out my pain,
to congeal
on the floor,
so I can kick it.

Something tangible,
I can get a grip on.
I smear it
on my face and hands
to feel, to smell
my pain.

Better than,
the elusive demon
stealthily, silently
eating away at my soul,
ripping me to pieces
on the inside
where I can’t see it,

So I

Slit my wrist
to bleed
out my pain,
to congeal
on the floor,
so I can kick it

Something tangible,
I can get a grip on.
I smear it
on my face and hands
to feel, to smell
my pain.

by; iblieve

[Dandylion]

Something tangible,
I can get a grip on.
I smear it
on my face and hands
to feel, to smell
my pain.

That is very powerful, the images it conjurs up! I have felt like that and you nailed this for me. Awesome baby, just awesome;)~Dandy

[Moonshine]

Another amazing write by you, Iblieve! I agree with Dandy; that stanza is outstanding, packed with intense imagery, and it leaves a dense impression on my mind. A great write!

Yours,
Moonshine x

[iblieve]

THanks Dandy and moonshine, at the time I wrote that it was either that or writing it out, times were emotional dark for me. I am glad I chose tow rite it out. It saved me. iblieve

[TearyEied]

Wow, good job on this one, I enjoyed it very much. Very strong message. Good write, thanks for posting.

Teary

[iblieve]

Thanks yearyeied, yes this was written in my darkest moment, things are better now. iblieve

[TearyEied]

i just re read this, and i realized that it almost sings to me... when you say
"so i

slit my wrist..."

it almost seems like a chorus, have you thought of adding music to it??

but again, good job.

teary

[iblieve]

So teary eied my darkness sings to you, i think it would sound great set to music, too bad I can't write music can you dear. iblieve

[TearyEied]

:) I try my hardest, but they all sound the same...so no, i can't. lol

Teary

[iblieve]

Ah too bad, it would of made a good death metal song, lmao. Well gotta go, my muse is huming another one so I need to get to my poems in progress fiole. Thanks for reading me my friend iblieve