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DarkestDoor
02-16-2004, 02:57 AM
does anybody have a cigarette?
need something to sooth
need something to drain
does anybody have a cigarette?
want someone to call
want someone to love
does anybody have a cigarette?
love something to share
love something to wear
does anybody have a cigarette?
does anybody have a soul to spare?
does anyone have a cigarette?
is anybody there?



is anybody there...............

Dandylion
02-16-2004, 01:08 PM
wow...now I really liked this. I wrote one called "I Hate" and it lists all these petty things with some serious things thrown in...excellent. I like how you did this one.~Dandy

spunky22
02-17-2004, 01:43 AM
Woah!! i absolutly loved your poem, I love the ending, I love the continuation with the ciggarettes (yes, i AM aware that I am possibly the worst speller to ever walk the AC but hey, i try..) Thanks for writing this one, i've not read anything like it in a long time, and it just increased my love for such raw, great poetry.
thanks,
Marji

DarkestDoor
02-17-2004, 03:00 AM
hey, thanks a lot, it really means something to me. i wrote this piece about the feeling of having nobody you can talk to completely or trust. sometimes it seems as if nobody will even give you a cigarette.

Territorial Hawk
02-19-2004, 07:03 AM
Darkest Door,

I like the use of repitition in this one.