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Dandylion
02-17-2004, 03:52 PM
Its long dark nights like these
that make my wrists ache,
pull me towards the bathroom
where I try to keep the razor contained.
Ive been doing this all wrong,
too slow down the creases of past scars.
Tough tissue doesnt bleed
like my eyes do from this window
of my soul.
Its all to much this time,
happiness fades like chalk in the dust.
I keep feeling the itch, the burn
to carve my wing out,
free them from my insides
where they scrape against my bones.
The atmosphere is too heavy now,
it's so hard to fly
with all the pressure pulling me down.
I want to run into the night,
feel the blood escaping in waves
until this painful light is just
a horrible memory.

Jessie
02-17-2004, 04:18 PM
For some reason, this made me think of my twin sister. Thank you for such a memorable piece of work.

woollams812
02-17-2004, 05:05 PM
Very deep, great imagery. Great post.

TearyEied
02-17-2004, 09:24 PM
so sad...so true...i feel it too well...wow.

Teary

iblieve
02-17-2004, 11:41 PM
I'm off to lock up the sharp objext, all too real my dear. I say leave the old scars alone, they reflect the past pain enough for me. Much love and I applaud another dark masterpiece. Your "C"

DarkestDoor
02-20-2004, 02:04 AM
not too shabby. captures the feeling well. I've written a couple pieces on the very same theme.

iblieve
02-20-2004, 02:09 AM
"Not too shabby," I thought it was brilliant. Love ya baby, no one writes like you. Your "C"

DarkestDoor
02-20-2004, 02:24 AM
"Not too shabby," I thought it was brilliant


oh, i agree. i was using understatement. when i say "not too shabby", it means i thought it kicked ass.

amazing kate
02-20-2004, 03:36 AM
A very intense poem, brilliant imagery.

Kate

Dandylion
02-20-2004, 11:08 AM
darkest door:) Thank you...lol. I am glad you liked this one, its one of my darker moments. They come and go like a tidal wave.

iblieve...thanks hon...you always encourage me baby and I dont know what I would do without you.

Kate...glad you read and liked:) Welcome to AC! I will look for your stuff too:)

Teary and Wool...thank you:) Im glad it carries a punch, it was meant to.

Jessie...well, I have no idea why this would remind you of your twin but I hope you liked it. Thanks for reading me:)

Thank you all~Dandy