cemetary rose

[darkfaze2003]

Cemetery Rose


On the plains of south Texas, in grey raining cold
In a lonesome old graveyard blooms one single rose
It’s a rose garnet red, that she planted in grief
And it blooms just one day, has not one single leaf


It’s a cemetery rose, blooming in the cold
It’s a cemetery rose, watching her grow old.
It’s a cemetery rose, planted at his feet
It’s a cemetery rose, watered when she weeps


Its branches are brown and its steel thorns they are grey
And she planted that rose on her own wedding day
At the altar they told her, your lover is dead
Now fifty years later she still has not wed.


It’s a cemetery rose blooming in the cold
It’s a cemetery rose, watching her grow old.
It’s a cemetery rose, planted at his feet
It’s a cemetery rose, watered when she weeps


She holds fast to a branch, to hold his hand in hers
And for one tragic moment, the two worlds they merge
As the pain of the thorns that are piercing her flesh
Weds the pain of the sorrow she feels in her chest.


It’s a cemetery Rose blooming in the cold
It’s a cemetery rose, watching her grow old.
It’s a cemetery rose, planted at his feet
It’s a cemetery rose, watered when she weeps

[Brittney L]

dark,
I have this tendency to see nearly everything I read here as being sung acousticly. I'm not sure if thats the intention that you had here, but if so, I think it would work well (Anything else would surprise me, but make sense at the same time). A dark piece, a sad love, a poor woman weeping and from your words "Cemetary Rose" it brings all of that nicely together, I think.
Those two single words say everything that needs to be said because in them lies the meaning so much deeper.

Great writing here!

Britt

[Allais_Lorrai]

I was really impressed with this piece. I could see it either done acoustically or in a Guns 'n Roses November Rain type fashion. Beautiful writing, very poignant. Good job

[darkfaze2003]

wow, thanks to both of you for your comments and just taking a look!!! yes it is acoustic as a sort of ballad but has a hard rock GNR chorus that is sort of a bridge startng with "its a cemetary rose..." so you both kind of nailed it. I'm still waiting for the final verse to come to me but since you guys liked the story, i'll sort of share what i want for the real final ending - thematically it goes like this..

where she comes from, no one knows
nor who she is nor where she goes
her name to them remains unkown
and they call her cemetary rose

[Lyly]

darkfaze, excellent piece with stunning imagery. I also like what you mentioned in your last response, "where she comes from, no one knows/nor who she is nor where she goes/her name to them remains unkown/and they call her cemetary rose" bien- Lyly

[Matt]

This is excellent writing. I really like the idea of her bieng called 'cemetary' Rose.