Delusional March

[topaztwin]

Golden tendrils
from an almost risen sun
paint a widening promise
across the river valley.

The rocky southwestern shoreline
seems to raise
its face
to the radiant presence.

Burbling, impatient water,
though,
casts off the feigned warmth,
wittingly aware
of the whipping wind
sustaining winter's
confident grip.

It swallows,
crossly,
the mendacious beams
that flaunt a shimmering beauty
and carries them downstream
depositing them here and there
between the lapping ripples.

[Michael]

You got that right, Pat. Well, I used to experience those delusions in Connecticut. Here in CA, the sun’s out, it’s warm (80F, 27C) and it probably won’t rain again until September or October.

But March is a deceitful little month, isn’t it?
Originally posted by topaztwin
Burbling, impatient water,
though,
casts off the feigned warmth,
wittingly aware
of the whipping wind
sustaining winter's
confident grip.

Nice use of onomatopoeia and alliteration here, Pat. It changes the tone of the poem and sets up the fourth stanza perfectly.

Nice work.

[Territorial Hawk]

Beautiful images, topaztwin.

[laleesh]

talk about "got that right", to quote michael! my grandkids see the sun and are breaking my head to go swimming, never mind it's just early march!!!!!

this is my kind of reading - very clear, and enjoyable!



:)
laleesh

[topaztwin]

Thank you friends; this scene was one I came upon the morning I wrote it, when I was crossing the bridge over the Wisconsin River to go to work. I kept running images through my mind all the way to work and until I had time to write it down. I appreciate the reads and comments. :)