waltz of the tyrannosaurs

[monkey boy]

the moon's a tooth in the eye of the sky
the sun is under the hill
the plain is gleaned to gristle and bone
the air is quiet and still

will you swing your tail with me?
shall we swing our tails
and tread the dusty earth as if
the sun will never fail?

the moon's an eye in the hide of the sky
stars are pebbles of dew
the plain is dark with dust and bone
the blood red dawn is new

shall we join in tooth and claw
our oldest dance, our primal law?

[Michael]

mb, I see an allegory here, an apologue of sorts. The rhyme scheme is well thought out and non intrusive.
Originally posted by monkey boy
will you swing your tail with me?
shall we swing our tails
and tread the dusty earth as if
the sun will never fail?
This is the stanza which, I think, supports my interpretation. Getting even finer than that, “as if the sun will never fail?” nails it.

We can learn much from this piece, mb.

Nicely written and extremely well expressed, IMHO. In today’s world, we need this type of teaching. Of course, more importantly, we need people to read and listen.

[ompholos]

agreed

[monkey boy]

thanks michael for your thoughtful (and spot-on) comments.
as it is, so has it ever been...

and thanks omphalos!

Mike

[AlienPoet]

mb--this is so extra ,extra 2 good and i dug it.

[the_grey_girl]

This really really really entertained me :) I liked it very much!

[monkey boy]

thanks, Dakotah :)

and thanks, the_grey_girl!

mb

[narayanan]

I agree with Michael. Thanks.

[monkey boy]

Thanks for reading and commenting, Narayanan!
mb

[wandelaar]

Hi,

I really liked the flow in this piece,

greetings!

[monkey boy]

hi there wandelaar, thanks and welcome to the AC!
mb

[naturalist]

monkey, I'm really loving your work. you have such a whimsy that is so unique and really gets it across. that is so hard to describe or do, yet you do it so well. great title. swingin' brother ~ :)

[monkey boy]

you're very kind, naturalist - thank you for your comments!
mb

[Territorial Hawk]

Wow...

[monkey boy]

thanks for the wow, hawkette :)
mb