Morning stroll along the terrace

[mike poet]

I took a morning stroll along the terrace
saw colorful gardens quite well groomed.
Sweet natures fragrance had filled the air
as an array of flowers had recently bloomed.

And then wind chimed in the distance
higher pitches wafted along on a breeze.
I counted 8 rings like an octave sings
to the dance of the branch with fluttering leaves.

[GG]

wow. they sing? i must look closely, now that i know they do.

"I counted 8 rings like an octave sings
to the dance of the branch with fluttering leaves."

[mike poet]

A wind chime sings in the mind of this poet. It would seem that the do ra me thing would be accounted for in the harmonized pitches of a wind chime. Whether they just use the first the third and the seventh or all 8 it is an octave. I have never studied music in this way. I mean like notes and such but it would seem that it would be one octave done in the size of the tubes used in windchimes..I donno though.

[GG]

thank you for the information, Mike Poet. i see now that you are referring to wind chimes in your poem. i have a wind chime in my room right now. and i studied music in high school, but not successfully. i mean that it could be counted that i haven't studied music at all.:) but i never did look at wind chimes the way you have.

thank you,
GG

[mike poet]

:D

[preston]

i love the sound of windchimes
i bought 2 sets back several years ago
each tuned to a chromatic scale
they do sound like music when the wind's just right

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[Michael]

Mike, “Morning stroll along the terrace” is set up beautifully.

The first verse serves very nicely as an introductiion. Calm, aware. Images are well expressed, both visual and olfactory.

The second verse makes your point. And actually, the whole verse is an extended onomatopoeia because it dances just like the leaves. How many notes of the octave are used is irrelevant, in my humble opinion. You create sound to this reader's ears merely by the way that the verse is written.

Nicely done. :)

[wandelaar]

Hi,

The flow in this one is very good it takes the reader along smoothly.

[mike poet]

I I honestly do not know what a chromatic scale is. The wind chimes under the carport has 7 tubes. My uneducated in the matter self figures that there are 8 notes in an octave with the 8th being the first note of the next octave. Thank you for replying and am curious what chromatic scale is, will look up.

Thank you Michael, there is always a pleasure in your replies and yes you are correct in saying the count in notes in an octave is irreverent. I guess I should have studied it a bit more before I posted this. I sometimes tend to mess up some decent poetry of mine as well as others, due to irrelevant specifics.

Wandelaar, I thank you and am glad this poem struck you in this way. I took allot of pleasure in writing this one after reading some Elbert Hubbard. I honestly do not know the definition of transcendental but that was what my mind would of called this. I should look up again but if memory servers me correct then transcendental is a process of thought to rise to a higher more Earthly level of thought.

[laleesh]

mike,
to raise an octave FROM earth

is hearing.

and i don't know the least thing about music but that they have some good stuff around! (in fact, i have b.b. king right here begging god for mercy, and i'm getting ready to beg to!)

:)
lala

[mike poet]

:D As always a pleasure Lala to hear from Lala.:D

[Poeticpiers]

Sets a peaceful mood in which to ponder musical mysteries

[laleesh]

oh, mike, i meant to say - between the title and the second line, i got this very clear image of sunshine out of shadow, creeping across the terrace, enjoying it's delights.


:)
lalala

[mike poet]

Thank you Poeticpiers, I think you are a better poet than I and I hope to one day be as good. You will hardly ever find me saying that to anyone.
La la it's strange that I can write decent and read others writings and have a good understanding of what was read but in life I have no clue so I go with the moment. I am glad this poem read that way, it was morning and the sun was in the East so you got what I meant.
:D

[Poeticpiers]

Thanks for vote of confidence Mike dont underrayte yoiur self Ive been writing for over half a century but Im getting there slowly ivor

[mike poet]

Thank you so much.:D I like to trip to nature when moment merits. I am glad you liked it. Spring is in the air and the 4 leaf Clovers and flowers and 66-degree weather. I'm loving it for sure.:D Am boiling Crawfish jamming to Master Of Puppets, ha ha Springtime is here.:D

[Territorial Hawk]

Beautifully written.

[Moonshine]

I really enjoyed reading this. It has a soothing and gentle quality, and the imagery was just perfect. A great write!

Moon x

[Beki]

Lovely

[TRexroth]

i don know what you were on in rehab but gimme some,
this poem is great mon, its really tied up properly
and the last two lines rule.

welcome back bro,
sincerly trex