Slowly...Spring Enters

[asaiahleigh]

Awaiting the days of Spring
Through six months of snow
As shallow puddles disappear
Green grass begins to show
Dark rocks surround gardens
Of new shoots soon to bloom
While returning Robins sing
Angry Sparrows sputter doom
At a black crow cawing over
Spying on it's food in flight
And ever so tiny in my sight
One new snail slowly passes
By my aquarium window light

[Territorial Hawk]

Very beautiful, I love the image of the sparrows and the crow.

[Michael]

asaiahleigh, a very interesting rhyme scheme. Did you plan it that way or is it sort of a free verse rhyme? Anyway, the way you have it, it isn’t intrusive at all, it takes nothing away from this lyrical piece.
Originally posted by asaiahleigh
While returning Robins sing
Angry Sparrows sputter doom
At a black crow cawing over
Spying on it's food in flight
I, like TH, also like the interaction among the birds. I don’t know that you can really call it personification because their behavior and activity is as it should be. It’s more like you got into their minds. Although “Slowly…Spring Enters” exhibits the coming of spring in many ways, this interaction is a very nice touch.

By the way, spring is my second favorite season. ;)