deplorable thor; just some more shock and awe

[laleesh]

all that was energy wrested me
held me
in all that was terror

and fear

so near to this great burst of thunder
i wondered
just what to do first

feel?

or hear?

spears left my heart

and a rumble departed in waves.

[Wylde]

assagai's of lightening angst. v nice.

[Territorial Hawk]

Oh wow...

[Mac]

and the thunder rose up
a shout from the grave
:D

[laleesh]

lol, mac! really!!!!!



;)
lalalalaBOOOOM!!!!

[Michael]

laleesh, I know that this is in The Nature Forum because, well, that’s where I’m reading it. :blush:

However, I read a double entendre into this dynamic piece.

There is Nature, for sure. Nature is described with your typically wonderful imagery, your unique rhyme, the sense of riddle that accompanies so much of your work. Nature is surely represented.

My attention is also called to current events, especially since you use the phrase “shock and awe” in the title.

Your last two lines are telling me to look, first and foremost, within myself to find peace.

I may be way off the mark with all of this interpretation. If so, I apologize. However, after several readings, I still see the piece that way and, seeing it that way, I find it very powerful.

[laleesh]

you know, michael, when that thunder exploded what seemed like five feet from me, that was my next thought - how those people in baghdad must have felt with the bombs exploding all around them. i guess that thought embedded itself in the poem after all, perhaps inspired it, though not consciously nor intentionally. i was simply after that swift second of pure terror and the slow, gradual and sweet relief thereafter.

the title came long after the poem and was changed several times before settling on this one, so yes, somewhere, at some level, it seems the connection remained.

almost funny and frightening too, just minutes before the "bomb" i had opened my window to ask for, to "call, the energy of the approaching storm! LOL!!! i don't think i'll be doing that again!


:)
laleesh

[Redstormy]

Powerful and succinct as usual. No one does it better my friend. :)


Red