Neo-Natal

[TRexroth]

in a phantom fork treeline
a burly ghost exists
its twinelike memories
are balloons in the wind

a curl in a stand
hosts the tines of hawks
bursting from the shells
while I learn to walk

[monkey boy]

I love the first stanza but must admit I am perplexed by the second!
mb

[naturalist]

mysterious!

[Michael]

TR, the metaphoric first stanza, in which nothing exists, introduces the second very nicely.

I interpret the second as an analogy comparing the beginning of life between humanity and, in this case, hawks. However, it could have been any other living creature.

Bottom line, “Neo-Natal” is a well written narrative of neo-natal no matter where one’s place is in Nature.

Nicely done.

[Poeticpiers]

the opening verse lead nicely to the enigmatic thought provoking finale

[naturalist]

way to wrap the authors! I just noticed that.

[TRexroth]

thanx all,
sort of the circular nature of things

[monkey boy]

way to wrap the authors! I just noticed that.
doh! duh, mb!

even better.
mb

[auroradraco]

mysterious indeed!

wrap the authors? Well now I feel stupid because I don't think I see what you're talking about. *looks again*

[TRexroth]

sorry authors

[Territorial Hawk]

I like it :)