the force

[TRexroth]

in the jaded layers
that descend
to coppery depths,
and the beer can
on the ledge,

forget the airplane
defacing the sky,
this is the sprout
a perfumed tendril
of chemical herbs,
shoot the shoot
unroll the greens
the crust may be strong
but the greens
are extreme.

[AlienPoet]

Thoughtmaking...interesting,i like it.

[ompholos]

nice use of the color green throughout
especially in the beginning with
the pun on "jaded" and the
choice of copper
which tarnishes green -
unexpected foreshadowing (foregreening?)

[TRexroth]

thanx alien
and omph you are the official disecter
of my poems i enjoy reading your inerptretations

[monkey boy]

grass grows in the cracks in pavement -
jungle swallows temples. kudzu conquers all.

'shoot the shoot' - great turn on this line.
mb

[Territorial Hawk]

Well done.

[naturalist]

loving chamber pot, the beginning is really, really nice. sets the mood wonderfully. when the lyrics pop in it's really surprising! great recording!

The suit is strong the heart is wild
a lucky man is a happy child.

what is that water sounding instrument - guitar with effect? really neat style tom! you have a good handle on your music, the solo is sweet. The intertwining of instruments sounds really neat! The ending, wow!

now about your poem - hehe

forget the airplane
defacing the sky,
this is the sprout
a perfumed tendril
of chemical herbs,
shoot the shoot
unroll the greens
the crust may be strong
but the greens
are extreme.

yeah! :D

getting used to your style and it's really growing on me! I love the way you set the tone in the first stanza. you have a way of glorizing what seems like and everyday anyday. I don't know if that makes sense.

[TRexroth]

well thank you very much for commenting on my music posts,
i dont get that alot. this is a song i wrote about a man who
was so far in the hole with poker debt that the only way to repay them
was to play a final game with some goombas and his son and if he did,nt
clear his own debt the arrangement was that he had to shoot his son,
which he does thus showing the depth of his addiction.

this song was recorded with my old band Ant Ruth, i play guitar and sing
and the bubbling type sound is probably a fuzzed out wah wah solo
that i panned around the other tracks.

again thankx for listening
and reading
Trexroth aka Tom