In An Autumn's Moment

[Dale]

In An Autumn's Moment


I sat with the heron today
He was not far away
He was intent on his next meal
Staring into the rushing water

Rushing sounds of fast water

And the wind rustling through the trees
My thoughts escorted to the ground with each brilliant
Colour rich leaf

Surrendering to invisible forces

The sun and clouds disputing
For their dominion of the sky

Warmth and cold
Are mine today

And the snake motionless on the footpath
He too
Was cold

Timelessly waiting
For the clouds to yield
The Sun’s claim to the sky

So here we are

The heron intent on his next meal
The serpent
The autumn's sun
And
Me with my thoughts

All
Sitting here on the ground
Waiting

In an autumn's moment

[Michael]

Dale, “In An Autumn’s Moment” is a vivid picture of that moment.

Your frequent use of personification almost makes this piece read like an allegory. However, you personify reality, not symbolism.
My thoughts escorted to the ground with each brilliant
Colour rich leaf
These lines may very well be the most creative.

When I read this poem, your imagery enables your moment to become my moment. Thank you for that. http://www.clicksmilies.com/auswahl/natur008.gif

[TRexroth]

this is a picture that you painted in my mind

awsom,
trexroth

[e-piph[lol]]

lovely lines
capturing a moment in time

[Dale]

Would like to say to everyone that took the time,
Thank you for commenting

[TRexroth]

its a really cool poem that took me to a state of mind,
i will look forward to reading more.

[poem2poes]

Yes. This is a snapshot of a moment in time -- brought me into it, as well. Nice work!

[Territorial Hawk]

a beautiful moment :)

[luvleerenee]

Dale, this was just lovely! I echo the others here, you captured the moment with clarity. I liked these lines particularly well:
The sun and clouds disputing
For their dominion of the sky
I don't believe I have ever heard it described that way before. Just marvelous!

I enjoyed, thank you!

Reneé

[wikidkiti]

Very nice. You truly captured the moment.

[judih]

i heard the leaves
and the water
and i would happily wait there too

*peace*

[Dale]

It Pleases me to have shared this moment with you. Glad you enjoyed it too......thanks for commenting

[Norman Anderson]

cool as the other side of the pillow

[Dale]

Norman, thank you for commenting........

[naturalist]

incredibly beautiful. you paint a wonderful picture, wonderful - thank you.

[Poeticpiers]

Spring is an odd time to be reading of autumn but I must say you transported me to an autumnd day quite easily

[Dale]

naturalist, Poeticpiers, Thank you for your comments and glad you enjoyed the read...

[shane]

Dale, this was a truly pleasurable read. Your words and rhythm effortlessly transported me.

We haven’t had a staff pick for a while….. ;)

[Dale]

shane, so glad you enjoyed the read....thank you for commenting..