one comma four two zero

[Accute_Pyro]

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Trees
the wonderful things that stride in these

Grass
look closer to see the hero's path

Sky
lines forsakingly the clouds deny

Space
what ever happened to the knowledge race

[Lil' Chaos]

I like this poem a lot. Nice read Bro. Props.

[e-piph[lol]]

yeah,

and yeah, what ever happened to the knowledge race?

I like this, too.

[winddance]

the knowledge race?

it's disappeared without a trace

nice one!!

[Accute_Pyro]

like hero's ... knowlegde can die with hope

thx all

[Michael]

AP, I don’t think that the fact that this is formatted poetry can be denied. I’m just wondering if it’s a specific kind of formatted poetry.

Even if it isn’t a predefined format, appealing to vision as a sort of hook is a wonderful idea.

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Trees
the wonderful things that stride in these


The descriptors for “grass”, “sky” and “space” seem to deal with misfortune and anxiety whereas the above descriptor for trees is light and upbeat. Am I reading this wrong?

If not, are you attempting to show a paradox?

The use of language in “one comma four two zero” is slick, skilled and vivid. I enjoyed this a lot.



To friendship,
Michael

[e-piph[lol]]

one comma four two zero was accute_pyro's posting count upon putting this one up (i thot) and...

well ... but his count has changed since you visited Michael, so you wouldn't necessarily know or have seen...

well ...

and maybe that has nothing to do - or everything to do - with this tantalizing poem :D

hmmm.. heros can die with hope
while i would add, hope alone is not enough
and..

thoughtful - thanks

[Accute_Pyro]

thx michael

sorry piph ... hope is all i have left , and i have yet to fall

Horah

thx both you

[e-piph[lol]]

in that case, you must be very tired?
let's add a little something to that hope, shall we?
I'm not sure what, just yet, but lets see what we can do..

[lovesetsfire]

we shot too many monkeys
in to space,
all our trees are sad.

nice one, Dexter.
simple and complex on the combo menu
for a dollar a praise.

peace.

:D :) :) :cool: :)

[Accute_Pyro]

**nods softly**

[Poeticpiers]

Simple but effective format Not a recognised form as far as I am aware
But somebody had to originate every form I lked the simplicity of the format and the depth of the content

[Accute_Pyro]

i use all "random creative" formats ... recognized or not ... so i don't know but .. thank you very much for your thoughts all ((poeticpiers)) may you all injoy words no matter how there thrown into presentation .. for is poetry a conveance of though or force of witch by we abide these words there perpetual freedom?

**saluting from the piers of baltimore to the thinkers of the world**

may you head be on the swivel and your feet be light

[e-piph[lol]]

one comma nine eight eight

[Accute_Pyro]

indeed piph

thanks for the loving reminder
it is somtimes we stray from form
from the paths we choose
its hard at times to avoid the illusions
and its good to know that somone is thinking
for other than thereselves

*wave*

[colinbaker62]

I think there is no quantitative shortage of knowledge and knowledgeable sources across what might be termed western civilisation in general. It's the quality of much of this knowledge that worries me somewhat.




Colin

[Accute_Pyro]

colin ... you may be right , but if you touch all your bases you shall see. with the internet,mass media comunication and so on ... we are all on the same levels and we are all found wanting ...